Learning Targets:

I can review and edit an essay;

      

I can reduce clutter in my write topic sentences which are like mini-thesis statements, previewing the supporting argument for each paragraph and directly supporting the thesis.

Does my introduction capture the reader's attention and give him or her a reason to keep reading? 


Easy Tips To Cleaner Prose

• italicize the title 1984 
• Cleaning up word clutter
• get rid of "This quote shows..." type of sentence starters following quotes (page 42 of gold book)
• except for the first paragraph, eliminate all "in the book" or "in the novel" or "in 1984)
• no passive voice
• no nominalization
• reduce the use of weak verbs
• verbs of being (was, is, am, was, were, are, be, been, seem, like)
• have, had, has 
• get rid of this is, that is, those are, these

Homework: Read 1124-1127 in The Language of Composition and do Exercise 1, #'s 1-4 in your notebook.

Print your final essay for tomorrow.  This weekend you will submit it to turnitin.com

Revised due date: November 17, 2014: Formal Journal Entry: It’s a _______________ World Your original poem inspired by It’s A Woman’s World – due Monday, November 17 (typed and formatted like Boland’s poem)…Enrichment Activity: Imitating the style, syntax, and structure of Boland’s poem, write a poem which traces the history to the present of some people or thing.