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For the Siddhartha chapter 1-2 vocab and Hinduism quiz...

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Optional Assignment, Due tomorrow (12/7): You may earn points back for up to three missed questions (6 points).
1) Write out the definition and part of speech
2) Write a sentence (or two) which contains the word (underlined) and enough context clues to demonstrate your clear understanding of the word.

Siddhartha Chapter 1 and Hinduism handout vocabulary

Some words are used more than once.

Hinduism Vocabulary

A.     Om B.     Atman C.     Brahma(n) D.     Brahmin E.      Upanishads

AB. Karma AC. caste AD. Vedas AE. ascetic BC. dharma

1.      In Hinduism, ___A________ is a Hindu sacred sound that is considered the greatest of all mantras.

2.      _______BC_____ is the practice of virtue.  What is virtuous depends most specifically on your caste and your stage of life.

3.      During successive reincarnations, one can accumulate good _________AB________ by leading a good life and doing good for others; however, being hurtful and selfish accumulates bad ______AB___________.

4.      There are many books the Hindus lay claim to as doctrines of their faith. A few of the better k own-texts are The Bhagavad Gita, The Upanishads, and The _____AD_______.

5.      The _______AC_______ system divides people into social classes.  These are very strict and hereditary.

6.      ______AC_________ is the priestly class, the highest class in Hindu society.

7.      A _______D___________ is also the title given to a Hindu priest.

8.      __________A_____ mystically embodies the essence of the entire universe. This meaning is further deepened by the Indian philosophical belief that God first created sound and the universe arose from it.

9.      The syllable is discussed in a number of the _______E___________, which are the texts of philosophical speculation, and it forms the entire subject matter of one, the Mandukya.

10.   A person's true Self or underlying vital force is called ______B_________.

11.   ________C_________ is the impersonal Absolute, the unproduced Producer of all that is. In the Vedas, Brahman is the force behind the magical formulas. In the Upanishads it is the supreme, eternal principle behind the origin of the universe and of the gods.

12.   When one is in the life stage of the _______AE__________, the individual dedicates all his energy to spiritual goals and rejects worldly pleasures.

Secular Vocabulary

a.      Avaricious b.      Insatiable c.      Ascetics d.      Disillusionment e.      Chasm

ab. onerous ac. palliative ad. austere ae. venerableness

13.   What is the holding of breath? It is a flight from the Self, it is a temporary escape from the torment of Self. It is a temporary _______ac_________ against the pain and folly of life.

14.   Wandering _______c________, they were three thin worn-out men, neither old nor young, with dusty and bleeding shoulders, practically naked, scorched by the sun, solitary, strange and hostile--lean jackals in the world of men.

                               

15.   If you find bliss in the forest, come back and teach it to me. If you find _________d________, come back, and we shall again offer sacrifices to the gods together.

16.   Did he not go continually to the holy springs with a/an  ____b_______ thirst, to the sacrifices, to books, to the Brahmins' discourses?

17.   He waited with new thirst like a hunter at a _______E_____ where the life cycle ends, where there is an end to causes, where painless eternity begins.

18.   Govinda knew that he would not become an ordinary Brahmin, a lazy sacrificial official, an  ______A___________ dealer in magic sayings, a conceited worthless orator, a wicked sly priest, or just a good stupid sheep amongst a large herd.

19.   …the hour was inevitable when he would again find himself, in sunshine or in moonlight, in shadow or in rain, and was again Self and Siddhartha, again felt the torment of the _________AB________ life cycle.

20.   "How could it be that amongst so many learned men, amongst so many Brahmins, amongst so many _______AD______ and worthy Samanas, amongst so many seekers, so many devoted to inner life, so many holy men, none will find the right way?"

1984 Focused Revision Assignment

Wesley

1984 Focused Revision Assignment

December 6, 2016

Points: If you earned less than an A on your paper, you can earn up to ten points added to your essay grade (A- papers can earn an additional 7 points to move your essay points to what you would have earned (usually 142- 144 points) if you had received an A on the paper; students who received a B+ through an F can earn an additional 10 points added to your essay grade).

Depending on the nature and scope of the issue that you are focusing on, you and I will reach an agreement on whether it makes sense to have you apply changes to the entire paper or to focus on revising two (2) paragraphs.

Due date: December 12, 2016

Assignment Parts:

a.      Write a rationale paragraph explaining why you feel you most need to work on this particular skill.  Generally speaking, I want you to explain why – based on past experience, comments on this essay and others, etc. – you feel this is a writing skill you most need to work on.

b.     Find a good source in print or on the internet which provides guidance on this writing skill. Copy/print a reasonable length (6 or less pages) for the purpose of annotating.  Read it and annotate it for important advice and tips, especially advice that pertains directly to your struggles.

c.      Next, choose the portions of your paper which need revision in this area, and revise them in accordance with the guidance provided by those sources. Using the cross-out functions in Word or Google Docs and/or highlighting/underlining functions, show the edits you made to improve your writing. Use text boxes/comments/endnotes to explain in the margins why you made your changes and/or how they made your writing better. All revisions must be typed.

d.     Write a strong reflection paragraph summarizing 1) the nature of the changes you made, 2) how they improved your paper, and 3) what you learned about this particular writing skill.

Choose from the following revision assignments.

1.     Writing clear, concise prose

You might want to choose this if your major problems are related to wordiness/language clutter, filler words, vague or empty words, misplaced modifiers, awkward diction or syntax, excessive use of the passive voice and verbs of being.

2.     Writing a focused, detailed and meaningful thesis statement and clearly connected topic sentences for each body paragraph

3.     Writing unified, coherent paragraphs/papers

4.     Properly introducing, embedding and punctuating citations (according to MLA guidelines)

5.     Avoiding comma splices, run-ons, fragments and other problems with punctuation (e.g. proper use of commas, colons, semicolons, apostrophes, etc)

6.     Choosing strong textual evidence and meaningfully and smoothly integrating it into your argument

7.     All other problems (e.g. redundancy, poor word choices, poor choice of supporting evidence, misinterpretation of the text, etc.)

TURN OVER

Mr. Wesley

AP English Language and Composition Per. 5

26 October 2016

Revisions

Area of Revision: Writing Clear, Concise Prose

Rationale: After viewing my rubric and revised paper, I have concluded that the focus of my revisions should be in the essay’s conciseness. If I successfully increase my conciseness, my writing will be much easier to understand, and more directly address the claim. I will do my best to not work around any points, and use direct syntax to address a statement. Also, the lack of specificity led to many overstatements. Overall, the lack of concise syntax and precise diction in my paper were major downfalls, making it difficult for the reader to understand my ideas.
Revision Examples: (First Three Paragraphs)

            Men are different than women. That is a fact. This fact puts forth (elicits) a plethora of thoughts, debates and opinions. For all of humanity, men and women have both taken a specific their own role in their society. The distinction of these roles is depicted by ancient male hunters and female gatherers, all the way up to more recent examples of businessmen and housewives. The separation of genders has played a major role in the trends of past societies. Until now. Our present-day world is evolving more than ever immensely. New arguments have emerged about many social issues, one of which is including feminism. Feminism is interpreted differently by everyone. Contrary to popular belief, feminism has been in existence for as long as humans have decades.

            First, in order to analyze the idea of feminism, we must define the term. Feminism is defined as the movement to establish political, social and economic equality between men and women. The definition can be interpreted in many ways. Personally, I believe that feminism is the desire of men or women, to promote equal opportunity, not equal outcome, in all aspects of life, and not restrict EITHER gender in that process. With the formation of equality to men, the goals of feminism are reached.  I believe that everyone should have the ability to advance themselves in their society with no restriction.

            Now, you may ask, how does any of this talk of feminism pertain to the novel in question, The Scarlet Letter? I believe that Nathaniel Hawthorne is, whether it was his purpose or not, indirectly displaying the idea that feminism is a part of every society, even this antiquated society. Feminism, has been around as long as since women have been belittled, therefore, the struggle for women’s equal rights has been around forever.

Reflection Paragraph: After researching concise language, I already feel that my writing has improved. Reading through my paper, I have identified a trend in phrases that can be replaced with more precise diction. Also, I have made myself aware of mistakes made when I am not fully able to convey a point, and now know to step back, and use the syntax of the sentence to convey what I am trying to say. Finally, I believe that by making my prose more concise, it clears the details up for the reader, and allows my paper to be more easily understood. Conclusively, learning more in this area of composition, and then applying it to my own writing has changed my techniques as a writer for the better.