5-7 minutes...Discuss Zinsser with partner and class...what were the best pieces of advice for you? From Simplicity?  From Clutter?

5 minutes:  But sometimes you need to add meaningful and descriptive words:

Exploding the moment:

A portrait of Julia Child leans precariously on my bedside table competing for space with sticky notes, pennies, and a plastic alarm clock. Julia has been my role model ever since I spent an hour at the Smithsonian American History Museum watching cooking show after cooking show. As she dropped eggs, burnt soufflés, and prepared a whole pig, she never took herself too seriously and with her goofy smile and accompanying laugh.

Review the rubric...

10 minutes...Use the rubric and Zinsser and Explode the Moment discussion to critique and edit your own paper...

I will do a visual check at this point. (5 points for a completed draft)

15 minutes...Now, find another person with and exchange papers. Write directly on their paper and on the rubric, providing meaningful, encouraging, helpful feedback.

HW: Do your own review of your first draft, making comments/edits/additions directly on your first typed draft.  Also fill out the rubric and at the top of that rubric write "John Doe's" Self-Review of 1st Draft.  Next, using your peer and self-review papers, type your 2^nd draft to bring in two copies for Friday. At the top of your paper, before the body of your essay, provide a paragraph which describes the types of changes you made between the first and second draft and why you made them.


Note:  Please save all of your typed drafts and peer reviews.  They will eventually be handed in.